I want to be a famous writer. So please read my story, even though it's a bit long. You will love it I promise

your use of words was great, you have a talent there. Just the story was a bit confusing. Why would you want to be friends with some one who killed your mother??. Why was there a telepathic cat in the story?. Definately have the talent, but strange story lines....but keep at it, I'm sure you will go places